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chemicals are deadly- the author had stated his/her opinion strongly, they cause the reader to be scared of chemicals by using a very effective word "deadly"
Chemicals are dangerous for plants and animals, too- the author states a fact showing that it is dangerous for things that we eat. This builds up their argument because it is showing that we are in danger because of it
will pollute the earth and make everyone sick.- this is warning people on what can happen using the words pollute and sick is very effective because pollute means to much of it and it is just their and will continue to build up and make people sick
Do yourself and the environment a favor and kick chemicals to the curb- this phrase shows people that getting rid of chemicals is helping us and our environment so there shouldn't be a reason to fear getting rid of chemicals and that it isn't a necessity.
-Ac<3
Answer: The author makes a strong opening statement, but should avoid "I think.. ." Let the statement stand on its own merits. "Chemicals are deadly." It is then evident that this is an over-generalization.
Not all chemicals are deadly. Many are beneficial. It may be true that her brother is affected by some of the chemicals in the food he eats, and it would be better for him to eat more natural foods with fewer chemical additives.
The reference to "a study said. . ." would be much more credible if the author had named the source of the study, or the credentials of the researcher who did the study. It would be good to specify "insecticides" or "pesticides" responsible for killing bees.
The conclusion is a good call to action, but again, too general. I like the alliteration of "kick the chemicals to the curb" but there might be a way to say "Be thougthtful about the chemicals you use, and the additives you consume; when possible, do yourself and the environment a favor and kick chemicals to the curb!"
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